Ainsley Brennan and Remy Robicheaux have known each other since childhood and yet neither knows how the other feels. It takes a jealous ghost haunting Remy’s house to bring them together. Ainsley is a CPA with a quirky side job of ghost busting, and her best friend Nan has asked her to help her brother Remy get rid of a pesky spirit with violent tendencies.
Ainsley’s never had real proof of spiritual activity before, and it’s not the only surprise in store for her. Remy is a lawyer with a bad habit of picking up women and dropping them like bricks.
While I liked the premise of provoking a ghost and could see many different directions this story could have taken, this story just didn’t develop the way I felt it could have. This was a very short story and was underdeveloped in scenic detail. The house is supposed to be the locus of the paranormal events, but there’s only one brief description at the beginning and not much description after. However, there were two or three scenes where the ghost has a fit that could have been used to build tension or anxiety that just wasn’t here. I also couldn’t figure out the “voice” of the characters. In one scene, Remy, supposedly a distinguished lawyer, refers to Ainsley’s chest with the word “boobs” which sounds more like something a frat boy might call them, and in another scene, he refers to them as “breasts”. This shows conflict in the character. As for Ainsley, the struggle she should have felt for her childhood crush, the “should I, shouldn’t I” moment didn’t build; it snapped from no to yes at light speed, which I could see if she was inebriated but she’s a sober accountant. I was also distracted by the grammatical errors.
I believe the story has promise if Ms. McHugh included more scene and character building.